Sunday, February 8, 2009

The Friendly Ghosts

This is a story whcih I created called the friendly ghosts. It is all about 2 ghosts who come down to Earth. Check it out.

Chapter 1 – Going to Eartha

“How do you scare underprivileged ghosts?” “Underprivileged ghosts, sir?” Trackh asked. “Humans, guys, humans. You should know that by the 31st century.” “ Ohhh. Then why didn’t you say so?” Villez replied. “Guys, can wee just get on with the question to see if you pass the How to be Scary Ghosts Exam? Now thee question is; How do you scare humans?” “Well that’s a toughie. Let us think about it. Ummmmm…..”

1 HOUR LATER

“Umm... You smile at them?” Trackh said not knowing what to say. “Scare guys not please.” Okay let us think about it then.”

HALF AN HOUR LATER

Villez spoke up and said, “Umm… sir, we don’t know.” “You don’t know? You spent one hour and a half not knowing the answer? Out, get out. You both are exiled from Craepa until you are forced to get out.” With the bloodcurdling eyes, they both started to quiver. “Whoa. Easy boy. ” Trackh said “Oh man.” Villez said interrupting. “What planet do we have to go to? Please not Criela.” Trackh said. “Okay then. Let me transfer you both to Planet Eartha.” “Nooo! Planet Eartha is even worse than Planet Criela. It’s very slow in technology. It’s like 10,000 years behind us. It’s the worst planet in the whole universe which is 20,000 galaxies.” Villez stated. “Whatever.” The councilor said annoyed. The ghosts bodies were vibrating, their heads were shaking, and their hearts were pumping. They were forced into a jet pod and shipped off to Eartha.


Chapter 2 – Bumping into Andrew

Andrew was a nine year old boy who was always bullied. He always wore a red T-shirt and jeans. He had muscles the size of a slice of tomato. Andrew hated all of his features. He thought he was a non-muscular, skinny 9 year old brat. He was always getting picked on by a seventh grader Buck. Buck was the most muscular and popular guy in school. At the moment he was getting a wedgie from Buck. “Stop it please. You got your wedgie of the day. Please let me go.” On the other hand there were Villez and Trackh in their jet pod. They were traveling at 5 gazillion miles per second. “Ahhhhh!”
BUMP! “Okay I can see a cerebrum, a cerebellum
And a medulla oblongata.” “A medulla what?” “It’s labeled Trackh.”

“Good! For a second I thought you were actually that smart
Okay. I see a kidney, an adrenal gland and an intestine. Ooh. I can see a White blood corpuscle.” “Good for you Trackh… oh my gosh I just realized that we are in a human body.” Can you guess who’s? If you guessed Andrew, than you’re right.


Chapter 3 – Beating Buck
“Come on hit him.” Villez encouraged Andrew. “Huh, who was that?” Andrew said getting very frightened. “Aww! Is wittle Andwew getting scared? Is the little baby…. POW! KICK! CRUNCH!



“Wow!” Andrew said looking at his hands disbelievingly. “I didn’t even know I could do that.” That day he was given high fives, pats on the back and his brother, Drake even walked home with him. It was his dreams come true. Then he saw a banner. It said; 5th Annual Race. Andrew said to his brother rather the ghosts said to brother “ There is opportunity knocking at the door and I’m
going to try out my luck and compete in the 5th Annual Race.”
“But you’ve always been a wimp for your whole entire life. How are you going to win that race?” Drake inquired. By the time Drake was done Andrew had already started. Before he started Trackh had something to say. “Okay Villez. You control the brain and I’ll control the rest of the body.” “Fine.” Andrew noticed Buck. Gulp. BOOM went the gun. The race started. Andrew zoomed, sped, raced, blazed and won the race. He got even more high fives and pats on the back but moost importantly he had beat Buck again.

Chapter 4 –Villez and Trackh Introduce Themselves

Villez and Trackh till now had been controlling Andrew and thought it would be a good idea to introduce themselves. They popped out and Andrew started yelling his lungs out. After Andrew had calmed down Villez and Trackh told him their names and why they had come here. In return, Andrew told the two ghosts about himself. They all made a deal that whenever Andrew wanted the ghosts he would have to call their names. For a couple of months the three stuck together like glue. They all told each other how they felt about each other and other problems. They would come home and talk about lots of stuff. Since Villez was so good at controlling Andrew’s brain, Andrew got an A+ in academics and an A+++ in P.E. thanks to Trackh. One day they were talking and suddenly Andrew got up. The ghosts went inside his body. It had just clicked Andrew that he and his mom were supposed to go to the doctor for an X-ray. They were going for an X-ray to see if Mrs. McCartney’s ring was in Andrew’s morning cereal.

Chapter 5 – The X-ray

When the McCartney’s reached the doctors office they had to wait for a long time. They were waiting for such a long time that Andrew started to play pranks on people. In the middle of a plan, Andrew remembered the ghosts. He was going to excuse himself to go to the bathroom but at the spur of the moment he was called by the nurse. It was too late now. Andrew quickly noticed that the doctor’s name was Dr. Phillips. The doctor examined Andrew’s body. Then he started the X-ray. On the first check he found Mrs. McCartney’s ring in the liver. On the second check, just to make sure Dr. Phillips found Villez and Trackh’s bodies. He was astounded. The doctor told Andrew that he would tell no one but after Andrew left the doctor called the baker, cook, police and the fire brigade and told them the story. At first they didn’t believe him but after a great description they started to think it was true. Pretty soon everyone knew about Andrew’s little ‘secret’. There were protest telling the ghosts to get out of New Jersey. Chapter 6 – Parting with Villez and Trackh

Andrew took the ghosts to the middle of the forest. They all started crying and hugging each other. When they could finally let go of each other there was dead silence. Andrew slowly started to back away and then he ran. Tears were pouring down his cheeks and he felt that his heart had shattered like his next door neighbors window. When he looked back he saw a flash of green and red and a twinkle in the sky. Andrew was very sad to leave his friends but he knew that he had become a better person.


1 comment:

  1. .. and this is your best story so far! I really really loved it.

    Loved the characters, their language, the emotions, and the detail. Also, the breakdown in chapters - very nice touch!

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